Friday Fictioneers 8/23

Posted: August 24, 2013 in Uncategorized

Submit a story or poem, inspired by a weekly photo in this fun, flash fiction group. You can read submissions or add your work HERE.  Comments welcome, as long as they are respectful and helpful, not hateful.

Category: Drama

Words: 100

Rating: PG

church_and_tree-claire-fullerCopyright Clair Fuller

Her first thought was that the building looked as dead as the tree. Stepping to the walk she paid the cabbie and made her way to the door, wondering why grandpa left her a crumbling mess.  Was it some kind of lesson? Dust scurried aside as she made her way inside. When her eyes adjusted to the gloom she noticed the envelope. A crisp, white envelope, untouched by age, and tore it open.

“Ms. Timmons;

Contracts ready, signature needed. Check for 1.9 million dollars, for purchase of your property at 505 Prospect ave. cleared for release. Stop by at your convenience.

She fainted,

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Comments
  1. Sandra says:

    I’m not sure I understand this – so I’ll come back later. Maybe it’s too early for me. 🙂

  2. That sorts out that problem. Lucky girl. But I do feel there’s a touch of “from the mysterious/gothic to the ordinary”. (Not that I would consider a cheque that size as ordinary.)

  3. Kwadwo says:

    Good for her. This cloud definitely has a silver lining.

  4. Hi ST,
    Guess it wasn’t such a crumbling mess after all. Different and interesting take on the photo. Ron

  5. Dear Ms. T,

    Who wouldn’t want to find that kind of a note. Nice inheritance and different story. One note (not for $) “She fainted,” at the end. I don’t think you really need that. But if you feel you do, it should have a period at the end, not a comma. 😉 Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  6. Dear Ms. Turnip,

    Nothing sweeter than found money, so to speak. Great story and a happy ending.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  7. Sarah Ann says:

    I like the turn around at the end, but would have like more about why she thought grandpa might have been trying to teach her a lesson and what the lession was. I appreciate it’s not possible to squeeze all that in. Liked the telegram-pacing of the letter too.

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