Friday Fictioneers – 2-22-13

Posted: February 21, 2013 in Fiction, Flash Fiction, self-esteem, short stories, Uncategorized, writing
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Submit a poem or a short story of 100 words or less, inspired by a weekly photo in this fun, flash fiction group. You can read entries, or submit your own HERE, or click on the little blue guy at the bottom of the page. Thank you Rochelle for keeping us going! Add you story to the Inlinkz tool so others can find your work. Simple and fun!

As always, feel free to point out a missing comma, a continuity problem or anything else that strikes your fancy.

My story this week actually touches on a real-life event from my youth. It’s a story my mom told me, I was not there. The land was turned into a large greenhouse area that supplied jobs for hundreds in the area. Not sure why this pix brought that to mind.


Men, mostly white, gathered outside the soon to be torn down barn, hoping for a job in the business being built. Whites up front, others in the rear. It may be post-war America, but they weren’t about to let any damn inferior race take their jobs.

They jeered when a skinny Latino pushed his way forward, yelling until the guards pulled him inside to meet his punishment. The gates opened and the men gathered, waiting for the appearance of the new owner to pick his team. Their jaws dropped when the skinny Latino walked out with a smile.

  1. This is a great story love the twist.

  2. kz says:

    ha! great twist 🙂

  3. Sandra says:

    Loved that! I hope he memorised their faces on the way in… 🙂

  4. Dear Turnip,
    A unique take on the prompt. A perfect fit.

  5. claudia says:

    Great scene…loved the post war era setting….

  6. kdillmanjones says:

    I read this as commentary on race, and loved it for that. Since that was the lens I was using, I would have loved to see more of their personalities, more of the uniqueness of the Black men in back and the sole Latino… if more words were allowed. 🙂 Perhaps that is what is most powerful here, that the narrator sees them, but barely knows them. Bien hecho, y muchas gracias. Thanks for this piece that makes me think so much more about race.

    • That was the intent, focus on race. The story goes, from my mom, that three Latino brothers, (nobody could tell me where they came from) saved and pooled their money until they could afford about 117 acres of land in my previously untouched hometown. (by untouched, I mean all white folks)
      They not only built a greenhouse, they refused to turn their back on anyone in need and hired qualified people regardless of race. I’m sure the story has morphed over the years, been glorified a bit, but the basic facts remain. They ate a lot of name calling, abuse and some suspected criminal activity aimed at their facility, but they kept at it. I stand in awe of this family, wondering if I would have the strength to stand or if I would cut my losses and run.

  7. Joe Owens says:

    Did not see that coming, but then that is what makes these so entertaining.

  8. JKBradley says:

    Back of the line, I’d say!

  9. writeondude says:

    Nice story, nice twist, and great that it’s based on a true tale.

  10. yebuccaneer says:

    Just deserts! Well done!

  11. billgncs says:

    a good story, and a better lesson!

  12. Parul says:

    Ohh! That’s karma bitches! lol
    nice twist, good work! 🙂

  13. annisik51 says:

    Oh, isn’t revenge sweet! And many of ‘inferior race’ lost their lives fighting in the war.

  14. Hi Turnip,
    Great job of capturing a past moment and chronicling they way things used to be and I loved the turnaround ending. Ron

  15. Brilliant and fair twist. That’s what change reality 😉

  16. We’ve been celebrating Black History Month at the nursing home. A local gentleman came to speak with us this week. Eugene Williams is 85 years old and helped changed our community. He attempted to enroll his daughter in the all white elementary school every year, taking his case to the Virginia courts until four years of appeals later, she was admitted. He founded Dogwood Housing, increasing housing opportunities for low income residents. He told us during his visit that continuing conversation is necessary. We still have a long way to go. Thank you for keeping the conversation going in your piece here.

  17. Interesting twist. Loved it.

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