The Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, is a group of writers that come together to share weekly stories based on a photo prompt. Go HERE to read or submit or your own story; or click on the little blue guy under my story.


copyright-Rich Voza

“I hope those things don’t delay take off,” she muttered as they waited at the gate.

“What’s things dear?” a woman asked.

“Those things on the plane.”

“There’s nothing on the plane dear,” she sniffed, moving away.

“Doesn’t anyone see those things?”

Met with blank stares, she glanced at the black, monkey like beings covering the planes skin. Rushing through the terminal, she canceled her flight. Hours later, she was eating pizza and watching T.V. when the news broke.  Flight 417 out of Newark had crashed, no survivors and no explanation.


  1. Sunshine says:

    very, very intuitive survivor…spooky tale you spun out. great job! ❤

  2. JKBradley says:

    Which truth is real?

  3. dmmacilroy says:

    She saw that Twilight Zone episode. Smart girl.



  4. Sandra says:

    Very scary. Can you actually leave a plane once you’ve boarded? I’ve often felt like doing that, particularly when they say there’s a minor technical fault they’re just fixing…
    The brief description of ‘black monkey like things’ is really chilling. Well done.

  5. wmqcolby says:

    Now you know why we lost one of the Mars probes … space monkeys!
    On a serious note, this has some atmosphere and well-timed deliveries of description and dialogue. Scary!!! In fact, I’d be interested in hearing more on this story. Wonderful!

  6. kz says:

    monkeys! now that’s a unique take… well she may be a little nuts but at least she’s alive. ^^ great story

  7. Sarah Ann says:

    Ooh spooky. ‘…no survivors and no explanation.’ Well told.

  8. I thought rather than being on the plane, she was in the boarding area. I think she has a possible job waiting for her if she takes advantage of it. Nicely creepy story!


  9. I liked this. I’m one of those people who listens and watches for signs. Sometimes a comment like this will sway my path. good take on the prompt.

  10. Wow, creepy. The description of the creatures swarming the plane is what makes the story believable, I think (though I agree with Sandra; I don’t think they let you off once they have you loaded – I’d believe the story more if they were in line to board, not actually on the plane, and she glanced out and noticed the monkey things*). It’s still a frightening, effective story.

    *I re-read the story, and now I’m not sure where she is. On one hand, she “returned to the terminal” – that’s what made me think she was on board. On the other hand, the woman she talks to wouldn’t have room to move away if they were actually crammed into the plane…so maybe they are still at the gate. I’m not trying to trash your good story, I’m just a little confused.

  11. Smart woman to cancel her flight. Creeeeeeeeeepeeeeeeee!

  12. Hayley says:

    Creepy!! Glad she trusted her gut!!

  13. rich says:

    like a twilight zone episode. well done.

    in this part: “Rushing through the terminal she canceled her flight.” would be good to put a comma after “terminal.”

  14. rgayer55 says:

    I’ve always felt there were some people who could see things most of us couldn’t. Obviously, your MC is one of those individuals. Good story.

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