Friday Fictioneers 7-27-12

Posted: July 27, 2012 in short stories, Uncategorized, writing
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Check out Madison Wood’s blog if you want to read, or write a story of your own for this weekly exercise. You get a photo prompt and a few days to write a 100 word story to share with the Fictioneers.

Feel free to comment or critique my work as long as it is constructive and not mean. 🙂 Story is about 25 words over 100.

Clinging to the shadows, the old man skirted the barn to avoid detection. Giving the horse a carrot to buy her silence, he froze, listening for signs of movement.  So far, so good, he thought, working his way through the rusty tools and lumber scattered over the ground. The last thing he needed was to get caught,  not when he was so close to the hidden  treasure in the water can that use to slake the thirst of sweaty ranch hands.

Pulling the jar from his pocket he opened the tap, letting an inch of liquid into the jar before pouring it down his throat, smiling as the heat spread.

“Gosh Darn!” he grinned, taking another swig,  “Sure hope that nag I married doesn’t find this stash!”

  1. rochellewisoff says:

    Y’know…I honestly thought of using the container as a stash of some kind but decided against. Artists think alike. Nice use of the prompt. Made me smile.

  2. Unexpected. Good job! Although it might have been unintended, I smiled at the use of “nag” for his wife when there was also a horse in the story.

  3. Even with a drink in him, he still sees the world in terms of horses! Nice nagging touch. Great tone of secrecy….. Randy

  4. Sandra says:

    Nice place to stash your secret supply. Nicely done.

  5. Lovely read! I can almost picture the look on his face 🙂

  6. Mike says:

    A great take on the prompt.
    Nothing like having a treasure stashed away out of sight of the old nag indoors.

  7. Nice twist. I thought there was money or valuables hidden in the bucket, and it turns out it was liquor. With me, it would have been potato chips and cheese.

  8. Carrie says:

    enjoyable little story. It’s always interesting to see what treasures someone will hide.

  9. Kwadwo says:

    Finders keepers.

  10. SAM says:

    Ah, the old moonshine bucket! Love this fresh take on the prompt.

    Thanks for giving me a read this weekend!

  11. Adam Ickes says:

    Love it! Was expecting him to be stealing from someone else, not keeping a secret from the wife. Nicely done!

  12. Jan Morrill says:

    Enjoyed this! There’s so much story surrounding this story. Well done!


  13. […] out Madison Wood’s blog if you want to read, or write a story of your own for this weekly exercise. You get a photo prompt and a few days to write a 100 word story to share with the […]

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